Monday, May 8, 2017

Artificial Imperfection Scene 1 (The first artificial intelligence unit of Mars)

This last week, I finished the draft of "Lightning Shifter." It's such a good feeling. I'm excited to have a trilogy completed. Now comes all the editing! 

In the meantime, I've decided to post small parts of a story I'm working on. This gives me a break from Lightning Shifter and it also gives me something to post on the blog. This story is once again on Mars in the future. I guess I just can't get away from Mars. 

Check out all the scenes available HERE.

Artificial Imperfection

On the Mars surface, Zamler drove a jeep a good distance away from the main complex. 
He wore a jacket and work pants made of radiation resistant material more for appearance than necessity. On the way, a plume of dust flowed from the tires. He passed buildings and biospheres that he’d worked on for over two-hundred years. He’d always looked on them with pride, but not today. Not with the loss of his fellow A.I’s, Suzy and Ralph.

Why didn’t Ralph at least talk to him? Instead, Ralph touched a hot wire, deactivated any internal safeties and overloaded his circuits until he blew his brain core. Management probably knew the details, but they never bothered telling him. They saw him as an A.I that didn't need to know everything. Zamler didn’t even know how Suzy died, but he would find out.

“Thanks again, I really appreciate this.” Nick sat next to him in a spacesuit and rubbed his gloved hands together and peered at him with blue eyes behind the visor. 
“I just gotta warn you I’m nervous.”

“Confidence comes with experience - at least for humans.”

“I’m trying my best.” He cleared his throat. “Will you be teaching our class again tomorrow?”

“Probably not.” Zamler hadn’t ever been in the mood to teach young humans who made many more mistakes than adult ones. It was all he could do not to scream at their constant mistakes. “I was just filling in for your regular teacher perhaps because of my extensive experience outside.”

Zamler couldn’t help wondering if Adam, the manager of A.I’s, had plans to turn him into a teacher. Maybe the newer A.I’s were a little faster than him, but he was still the best and most experienced builder on the planet.

Continue to Scene 2

I'd love to hear your thoughts on this. Feel free to be critical. It is only a draft, and I will take all the help I can get. 

Hope to post the next one on Wednesday. 


Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Good luck with the editing.
I might need to read the entire scene to understand. So, they are all AIs?

Pat Dilloway said...

A good start. I assume you mean plume of dust not plum. 😉

Cindy said...

Alex: Zamler is an A.I. Nick is a human

Pat: Thanks. I'm sure there will be some typos.